Whenever I see a picture of a river and trees, I can’t help but think of days gone by, romantic and adventurous and dangerous. This week’s prompt for Magpie Tales was quick to bring those thoughts to mind. I’m pretending I don’t see the tops of the buildings in the background. 🙂
Around the ancient river bend
lies future hopes and dreams to tend.
I rushed to meet them without fear;
I beg of you my darling dear, prayers do send.
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I’m off to find our future life~
Me your husband; you my dear wife.
If I do not return to you
I am under the waters blue; death here is rife.
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Jealousy, greed and lust rule here,
Our captain a weak profiteer.
Each day I rise with knowing dread
By evening fall I may be dead, without my dear.
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I’m also submitting this to the open link at Real Toads. I kind of got carried away with yesterday’s challenge and used the Florette format again.
Oo, a bit of doom and gloom…
A technically challenging format, but you handle it beautifully…
My first time here and I admire the rhythm pounding at the end and the message. They are interwoven so well.
fantastic stanzas, the final one I found to be particularly strong. enjoyed the read. thanks
“Each day I rise with knowing dread By evening fall I may be dead” … Ah, the joy and hope of a new day dawning. 😉
You do make the florette look effortless. Well done
delish. like a mini journey.
Another florette poem…very lovely share ~ I like the ancient river bend ~
You took me on some lovely time travel here…
an elegiac florette. thats a new one and a delightful poem.
Beautifully done, with perfect rhythm and rhyme. It reads like a poem from back in time, that old fashioned gallantry.
I just love the cadence of this form, it makes it sound kind of old world and bard like. You do this well, I think you are a natural…great work.
Ah, we both combined the same two writing prompts. I like the direction you took. The form lends itself well to your romantic subject matter. Well done you!
Ahhhh, you got the florette just right.
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I agree with Kerry in that you make the florette form seem easy and I know its not. I really love this, especially the first stanza.
Beware of pirates round that bend………..
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This is wonderful, Teresa. You make the florette look easier than it is. I read this as a song of farewell of a husband to wife – he to embark on an uncertain journey, she to remain faithfully behind.
smiles…enchanting melody in your verse….and so true…the water carries life and opportunity but also peril…i like his desire to return once he finds it and hope he makes it…smiles.